For the past week in writing we have been writing a recount on the Awapuni Fun Run!
I found it easy to but detail into some of the obstacle courses because on the Fun Run day I could memorize and remember all of the obstacle courses.
I found it challenging to find the right font to help the reader read the story.
Next time I will find more interesting words to put into the story so the reader doesn't read the story boringly.
Kia Ora Grace, I really like how you used really great describing words. You taught me alot about the Awapuni School Fun Run so that I know exactly what happened during the Run. Maybe next time you could add a little bit more to your stems and your background. Ka Pai Grace!
ReplyDeleteYours Truly Kristie-lee.
Morena Kristie-Lee! Thank you for your wonderful feedback! It really showed me that you actually read my post :)
DeleteYour helpful feed back is the exact as mine I think I should really work on my stems and make them longer and my background is really plain :(
Thank you for your AWESOME feedback!
From Grace! <3
Hi, Grace
ReplyDeleteYour blog post is very amazing.
I like how you made the font bigger so people can see it.
Next time you could change the background so more people want to look at it.
Kia Ora Addison, Thank you for the wonderful feedback it really helped. Next time I'll try and change the background so it's more attracting. Thanks for the awesome comment!
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